Example Letter #1
Thank you for offering me the position of Director of Engineering for Doe. I would be delighted to affiliate myself with such a dynamic and innovative company.
When we discussed the position, you mentioned the opportunities for profit-sharing and stock options. Participating in these is very important to me but I did not see any mention of them in your offer. I need to know if these are available to me as a member of your management team.
I would appreciate hearing from you regarding this, but in any case I will call you early next week. I look forward to getting this resolved and joining your team.
Example Letter #2
I was pleased to receive your offer of a position at Doe. I have wanted to work for your company for some time.
I will be able to start work on August 1, as you requested in your letter, but my daughter will be undergoing major surgery in the middle of August, and I will need to take ten days off work. I can either start work on the first of September or, if you prefer, I could take ten days leave in August. I am happy to accept all the other conditions as outlined in your letter.
I will call on Friday to discuss my starting date. I am very much looking forward to seeing you again and to meeting my co-workers.
Example Letter #3
Thank you for offering me a position with Doe. I am excited to work for such an outstanding company and look forward to making my own contribution.
When I asked about tuition benefits at the interview, you offered to find out if I would be eligible to receive them. Since I am already two semesters into my degree, I am anxious to know whether I qualify. I am confident that my completing my MBA will be of real benefit to the company. Please let me know about this as soon as possible. I will try to call you on Friday, June 3.
Example Letter #4
I want to thank you for offering me the position of computer specialist with your company. I am eager to get started and learn the responsibilities of the work projects. With the qualifications I have to offer, I am confident I will be able to make a meaningful contribution.
Overall, I am pleased with the conditions we have already discussed. However, I feel that further negotiations are needed regarding certain conditions of my employment. If we come to the negotiating table prepared to listen to each other's recommendations with open minds, I am confident that we can reach a mutual agreement in a short amount of time.
Once again, I want to thank you for offering me this position. I know that this will be a great career move for me, and I just want to make sure that I clearly understand the details of my responsibilities and duties before my employment begins. I believe that negotiating the conditions of my employment now will make my transition smoother into your company. I look forward to meeting with you in person soon, so that we may initiate this process without delay.
Write Your Letter Step-by-Step
Express your pleasure at receiving the offer.
Mention the condition(s) that you wish to modify, and how you wish to change it/them.
If appropriate, mention other conditions or details of the offer that you are able to accept.
Indicate how you will make your next contact.
Reaffirm your interest in the job or company and express your confidence that you will be able to contribute to the company.